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I ran fast from the mysterious shadow that was chasing me throughout the dark, creepy hallway. I turned at the corner to escape the shadow but ran into another shadow figure. The figure smirked as it raised a bat full with nails ,and hit me with the bat. Because of this I jerked awake with a loud ear piercing scream.
  "(name), are you okay," my mother yelled up to me with her voice full of concern. I could not reply to her for the dream had happen before but never this far.
  After a few minutes, I yelled back, "Yeah, just a nightmare." My mother knew nothing of this nightmare, for she would think I'm insane. I got up from my bed in my (f/c) tank top and (s/f/c) pajama short, and walked over to my full body mirror. I nearly screamed, because on my right shoulder was a bloody red spot. I felt fear grow in me, along with some other unnameable emotions. I knew I didn't have the spot last night, and there is nothing sharp in my room that could have gave me this.
  My mind then went back to the dream when the second shadowy figure had brought down that bat on me, it had to be then but how......
This is an ideal that I have had for a while but never got around to doing it......... But I will need help so could you find some names for the 2P allies and the 2P axis for me, please!?!? I own myself and the ideal but not 2P hetalia, or you...............


I know it suck but try and enjoy..... Please!
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PLEASE continue!!!! This story has SERIOUS potential, and I just can't wait so see the next chapter!! I love 2P stories like this.
You have some serious mad skillz and this...Oh, I can just SMELL hard work in it. Keep it up!
I'm rooting for you and waiting for the next chappie of this awesome story!
Oh, and BTW, can you include 2P Spain Romano and the others? That would be totally cool!
I do not think that anyone else has as much potential and knowledge as you do. You have a real talent for writing.
Wishing for teh next chappie,
~Angel
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you make in like they capture her and make them her slave. Then later in the story she becomes a broken slave with no hope left in her, and then they start feeling bad for her and that where the love begins. And they all want the reader (me) for themselves and it just like a love story filled with romance, sadness, jealously, and of course everyone favorite thing in the world Lemons!!!! from every character that the person named down their and make sure to make me numb to them so when they start acting nice i'll be confused
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Is there more to this story??
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Kyo-Hart Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
There will be but after my senior year is over. Basically after may 17 I will be working more on all my stories.
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guardianarchangel Aug 7, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Here are the names for the 2ps
2p Italy- Luciano
2p Germany- Lutz
2p Japan- Kuro
2p america- Allen
2p canada- Matt
2p england- Oliver
2p France- Jean
2p Russia- leonardo
2p china- Tao
2p romano- Flavio
2p spain- Toni
2p prussia- Gilbert
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JZFinland-1 Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
2p America. Jason/Al
2p Canada. Matt/Michael
2p Russia. Ion
2p France. Vincent/francois
2p prussia. Gilen
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Kyo-Hart Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!
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guardianarchangel Aug 7, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Your welcome
I know my hetalia
and 2p
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Ilovehetalia04 Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I definitely think it should be 2P! America! It'd really fit with his personality, well, at least so far ^^
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Bordomgirl5 Jun 26, 2013  Student Photographer
Please continue! It's sooo awesome and I can't waite for the rest!
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MiraakTheDragonborn Jun 25, 2013  Student General Artist
Funny...I can scream EXTREMELY loud....yeah...let's just say my vocal chords can make a 75% old man cover his ears.....(That old man is my dad...yeah...)
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Kyo-Hart Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lolz
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